Life and Death Part 1
81 years old looks like its the end for me. Life has gotten old but I've gotten older. Looks like I've got to say good bye. OH YEAH that's right I can't move because I'm too weak. Fell to the ground gasping for air. There I was dead on the ground on living room floor. THEN BOOM! I was transported to stairs then I steped on it and...
Interesting story! I think you need to use some commas in your first sentence. Also, you don't need the capital letters. You could express that he is yelling by putting an exclamation mark.
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