Two Figures
It was a dark night with a blizzard outside. With only a flame from a candle. I heard knocking in the attic like tiny feet as the flame flickered and then went out with a big blow. "Click clack." I saw tiny people sprint across my stairs. Then I went to go check it out but saw two black figures. So I ran back downstairs but the feet we're behind me I turned around and two of my funny children.
The middle of your story doesn't really make a lot of sense to me.
ReplyDeleteAlso you should have a comma after outside in your first sentence.
Overall good start.