It was a warm and happy day, but suddenly the baby got onto the top of the oven and turned it up fully. Two hours later it started a fire, and the fire department came with super wings for moments like this. They grabbed the mom and baby and got them to safety. The mom said " My son is still in there." So the firemen went into the building searching for the child but couldn't find him so they started to turn back but suddenly the son appeared had a wingsuit and jumped out the window and crashed into a building and died.
Be sure to read over your story to a peer or an adult to check that it makes sense and for fluency. You have many run on sentences and your story jumps around a bit making it hard to follow. Spend some quality time revising and editing after your fist draft as it will make for a better story.
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